Yes o.b.s.c.u.r.i.t.y.
Then: make some reference to an ancient tome
or classic poem
that only the nattering narcissists
recognize
Finish: with a flourish
or a surprise or a twist
but make it something oh so very clever
read the entire mess
aloud to someone with
no objectivity
who would swoon (or feign swooning)
at even a sophomoric rhyme
just to keep you
I spent that night learning not to love you:
your contemptible creamy olive skin
those dreadful morning lake smooth eyes
the vile way your soft lips fit mine
I can’t be kept
Can’t be fooled
My heart knows a bad poem
and it knows a bad love
Even one that flames high
for a time . . .
like ours
So like a bad poem, you are
relegated to
that corner place
where couplets and starlets
dance the night away
In obscurity
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ha...bad love and bad poetry...both will leave you with too many headaches...snappy write...i thoroughly enjoyed it...
ReplyDeleteHa! A bad love, like a bad poem, keeps drawing you back in hopes you can perfect it.
ReplyDeleterough write - ha - bad love and bad poetry...you always hope there still can be sth. done to save it...
ReplyDeleteAh liked the clever turn of phrase as your turn away the delectable - the bad, the beautiful. Well written and well done, you! G.
ReplyDeleteI was immediately engaged, but the twist was killer, especially with the line 'I can't *be* kept' leading into the perfect analogy, junk poetry, junk food, junk love, all easy on the appetite, designed to attract, and empty and often fatal as well. Excellent stuff, my pleasure to read.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this piece. The tied perspectives flow very well to make the image. Nice write ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteIt feels weird to applaud this, as if I'm a voyeur on such devastation of words and bad love.
ReplyDeleteBut I do applaud for the way it made me feel, and your twists to the heart.
haha so true, they could leave one with quite the lasting headache, nice piece.
ReplyDeleteSo true, I long for a man that is moved by poetry....really liked the last stanza:
ReplyDeleterelegated to
that corner place
where couplets and starlets
dance the night away
In obscurity
keep posting, hope all is well.
ReplyDeleteHello,
Glad to discover your poetry talent, invite you to join our poetry picnic today, free and fun, free style commenting.
First time participants are encouraged to share 1 to 3 random poems, or old poems!
We're Open until Thursday, 8pm, American Central!
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